Changes To First Draft

Changes we have made since publishing our first draft

This is our second draft of our teen angst opening. We have made many changes since the first draft as a group since receiving feedback from our class, for example we have added in a voiceover of the main character to make the audience understand the film plot better. We made the decision to include a voiceover as we got inspiration from other teen angst films such as mean girls and easy a who also include a voiceover. We have also changed one of the music tracks as we felt like it didn't flow as well as we would of liked it too so we had added a more upbeat non digetic song which fits better with the target audience as it is modern party music. We have also added more pink bold titles to add more of a girly feel to our opening to help connote the teen angst genre which will help to further attract our target audience.

We also have added in several more party scenes to help add more depth into our film and make it more appealing to our specific target audience. The party scene that we added in connotes the genre further as teenagers can relate to parties and drinking alcohol which we thought would make it more appealing to our target audience. Since our first draft we have also played around and adjusted the music levels to help the voiceover flow a lot better which we think has improved our film opening dramatically.